Students who complete English 110 should:

Demonstrate the ability to approach writing as a recursive process that requires substantial revision of drafts for content, organization, and clarity (global revision), as well as editing and proofreading (local revision).

Paper One Final Draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sXLcAcxB3kcvDnL-hj91QyDAJObURphyLsSbF1XpMvM/edit

Paper One Rough Draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vb-Od2iryneqYPo1sVVB21G-7UbCa_PZNXh_sVLByg4/edit

With my first paper, I had to do revisions such as completely changing my thesis to show what I was thinking and what I believed rather than what the authors were thinking. I had to really let myself lead the paper and use what the authors were saying as my evidence and although I understood the concept, I had to make revisions so that it was obvious I had connections to what I was talking about. Throughout my papers, I start to add my personal experiences more, but specifically for paper one I brought up very personal experiences while still being clear and organized with what I was trying to say. Paper one overall was my best paper, with a hundred, and although my final draft came out wonderfully, I still had to go through the process all writers have to go through. I think proofreading, revision of rough draft(s), peer editing, being organized, and being clear is highly important where each step really pushes you to have your best work. In paper one, I demonstrate my ability to engage in both local and global revisions by proof reading and fixing grammar issues and revising paragraphs, an example being the last sentence in my first paper. Originally I ended my paper with a question, “American society, land of the free where one can be themselves, but how can one be certain that the land is free when we are forced into categories, the opposite of being able to be ourselves?” and ended up revising it so in my final it is “American society, land of the free where one can be themselves, but the thing is, that’s not true at all.” I shortened it to make it have a stronger ending rather than the original question. I really listened to what my peers had to say and what the professor had to say, revising other sentences whether it was to explain in more detail, re-writing the whole paragraph to make it run smoother, and just being able to have the readers understand what I am saying in my paper. Looking at my rough draft and final draft, I think I can take away that revision does strengthen ideas and create an overall stronger paper which is why it is also important to be open-minded when writing a paper. I think another big thing is how in my original rough draft, I spoke so much about what the authors were saying, not what I thought of it and I am glad I took the suggestions I was given to make my final draft include all connections that was needed. I picked paper one because it was overall my strongest paper and I would not have gotten the grade I did if it weren’t for the simple idea of revision.